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June 25, 2009

I always told you
Mother
That I loved you

I should have told you
Mother
That I forgive you.

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23 Comments leave one →
  1. June 25, 2009 12:17 pm

    Oh, the ending gave a jolt. It’s so touching.

    • June 25, 2009 1:55 pm

      Thanks. When I thought of it, it gave me a jolt as well.

  2. June 25, 2009 4:41 pm

    I was jolted too by the last line!

    stuff I never told you

  3. June 25, 2009 5:15 pm

    You know, this poem is very simple but very powerful. I had a jolt too when I read the last line.

    • June 25, 2009 5:18 pm

      As I mentioned, I had a jolt when I was writing it. It was pretty difficult…

  4. June 25, 2009 7:34 pm

    mark the chilling second stanza helps to bring out what discretions may have taken place behind the first stanza. your ambiguity makes the reader explore the piece more closely, and presenting a challenge is never a bad thing. -lawrence

  5. June 26, 2009 1:31 am

    The economy of expression is magnificent. A fine, fine poem.

  6. June 26, 2009 1:41 am

    nicely expressed

  7. June 26, 2009 1:47 am

    Difficult. But sure-footed. The strength is in the unwavering brevity. Well done.

    • June 26, 2009 4:03 am

      Sometimes, you must confront things head on. Difficult or no.

      Thank you for your feedback. It is very much appreciated.

  8. June 26, 2009 4:42 am

    Forgive you. Thats lots said. Wish could know more.

  9. June 26, 2009 5:19 am

    This sends the mind racing. Was the needed forgiveness for a misstep? for being absent/dying? for something essentially small (when seen from the outside) except for the way it grew in the mind of a child? Compelling.

    • June 28, 2009 2:08 am

      All of these and more. Or less.

      Individual and Universal themes. And thanks!

  10. simplifylearning permalink
    June 26, 2009 11:04 am

    you penned the inside of my heart, the only difference is that i was talking to my father.

    • June 28, 2009 2:08 am

      Thank you. It is nice to write something that speaks to others.

      That is gratifying to me.

  11. simplifylearning permalink
    June 26, 2009 11:05 am

    so as not to create confusion… my poetry blog is mymemoirofyou. simplifylearning is my business blog.

    thank you for taking the time to read my poetry.

  12. angie permalink
    June 27, 2009 11:38 pm

    nice one, Mark.

    quite moving.

    😉

    • June 27, 2009 11:41 pm

      it is me; for some reason it didn’t take my link the first time.

  13. June 27, 2009 11:39 pm

    strong one. i like it very much. it reminds me something o wrote some time ago… maybe on the same line..

    happy to find your space here mark

    blessings

    D!

    • June 28, 2009 2:09 am

      Thanks. I like much of what I read and enjoy the running around reading what others do with the same starting point.

  14. July 1, 2009 5:04 am

    So simple and yet so impossible. Well done!

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